Update Apollo3.mdx for Java to match the one for Android (#7165)

Author: lizokm

src/platforms/java/common/performance/instrumentation/apollo3.mdx

@@ -10,14 +10,16 @@ notSupported:
 
 <Note>
 
-Capturing transactions requires that you first <PlatformLink to="/performance/">set up performance monitoring</PlatformLink> if you haven't already.
+To be able to capture transactions, you'll need to first <PlatformLink to="/performance/">set up performance monitoring</PlatformLink>.
 
 </Note>
 
-Sentry Apollo3 integration provides the `SentryApollo3Interceptor` and the `SentryApollo3HttpInterceptor`, which create a span for each outgoing HTTP request executed with an [Apollo Kotlin](https://github.com/apollographql/apollo-kotlin) GraphQL client. For easier usage, the integration also provides extension functions on the `ApolloClient.Builder`.
+Sentry's Apollo3 integration provides both the `SentryApollo3Interceptor` and the `SentryApollo3HttpInterceptor`, which create a span for each outgoing HTTP request executed with an [Apollo Kotlin](https://github.com/apollographql/apollo-kotlin) GraphQL client. The integration also provides extension functions on the `ApolloClient.Builder`.
 
 ## Install
 
+To install Apollo3:
+
 ```xml {tabTitle:Maven}
 <dependency>
     <groupId>io.sentry</groupId>
@@ -61,7 +63,7 @@ val apollo = ApolloClient.builder()
 
 ## Manual Configuration
 
-When using a custom `NetworkTransport`, the `SentryInterceptors` need to be added manually, because `HttpInterceptors` need to be added to the `NetworkTransport`:
+Because `HttpInterceptors` need to be added to the `NetworkTransport`, the `SentryInterceptors` have to be added manually if you're using a custom `NetworkTransport`:
 
 ```java
 import com.apollographql.apollo3.ApolloClient;
@@ -122,7 +124,7 @@ In Global Hub Mode, all threads use the same Hub.
 
 ## Using With Kotlin Coroutines
 
-To make sure that a coroutine has access to the correct Sentry context, provide an instance of `SentryContext` when launching a coroutine:
+Make sure that your coroutine has access to the correct Sentry context when launching, by providing an instance of `SentryContext`:
 
 ```kotlin
 import com.apollographql.apollo3.ApolloClient